Home is a great-unrealized influence on the way we live Qualifiers: emotional feelings experienced, spiritual and cultural morals, and physical comfort gathered from one
You might want to explain how this is not simply where a person lives and is instead a feeling for one of your qualifiers. What do you mean by a physical comfort gathered from one? If you use these qualifiers, make sure to expand on them and explain what you mean clearly so your readers have a clear picture.
I am not sure what you mean by home being a great-unrealized influence. You should be more clear on this. Is home the feeling of being at ease with yourself spiritually, or a physical house?
Try to explain what influence means and "the emotional feelings" (like what kind?). Or maybe, I think you should find another simple definition for "home".
I like the topic. You can talk more about how living at home affects "the way we live"? Talk more about the culture. Like I'm from an asian country, children don't get to move out whenever we want. No wonder people here are more mature and responsible because I have to deal with life since they're 18.
Your definition is a little flimsy it doesnt really seem to define what a home is. The qualifers are good but there also seem to be a lot of counter arguments. good topic it just needs some more refining.
Why is this influence on our lives "unrealized?" This seems to be an important part of your paper. Are people just so used to their homes that they can't imagine what life would be like without this notion of "home?"
I'm confused as to why home is an influence rather than a place. This gives you a lot of room to clear up this confusion, making it arguable. I would have had a different definition than this for the word 'home' which is why I'm thinking this is quite a debatable definition. So good job.
Your qualifiers are great for they are unique and argumentative. I just think that your qualifiers are a little wordy, so I would condense them for they are more concise and direct.
When people are asked what is the definition of home, they would just say a place someone lives. I think you defined your word very specifically, and its a good definition. In your qualifiers are a little confused, but It does support you definition, and I am very in curious in reading your paper.
when you say emotional feelings are you going to talk about the types of emotional feelings or just leave it broad
ReplyDeletewhat do you mean influence? i would try to clarify it in your qualifiers! fun idea though!
ReplyDeleteYou might want to explain how this is not simply where a person lives and is instead a feeling for one of your qualifiers. What do you mean by a physical comfort gathered from one? If you use these qualifiers, make sure to expand on them and explain what you mean clearly so your readers have a clear picture.
ReplyDeleteMaybe add in another qualifier where one is comfortable at where they sleep, because those qualifiers don't really account to me. Just a thought.
ReplyDeleteI don't really understand your simple definition. Is it a place or just an effect on the way we live?
ReplyDeleteI am not sure what you mean by home being a great-unrealized influence. You should be more clear on this. Is home the feeling of being at ease with yourself spiritually, or a physical house?
ReplyDeleteTry to explain what influence means and "the emotional feelings" (like what kind?). Or maybe, I think you should find another simple definition for "home".
ReplyDeleteI like the topic. You can talk more about how living at home affects "the way we live"? Talk more about the culture. Like I'm from an asian country, children don't get to move out whenever we want. No wonder people here are more mature and responsible because I have to deal with life since they're 18.
ReplyDelete*POSSIBLE ARGUMENTS* What about abusive homes, are those not really homes? What about people who have no real home, yet still have those feelings??
ReplyDeleteI agree with Holland that your definition might not be that argumentative but your definition is good
ReplyDeleteYour definition is a little flimsy it doesnt really seem to define what a home is. The qualifers are good but there also seem to be a lot of counter arguments. good topic it just needs some more refining.
ReplyDeleteWhy is this influence on our lives "unrealized?" This seems to be an important part of your paper. Are people just so used to their homes that they can't imagine what life would be like without this notion of "home?"
ReplyDeleteI'm confused as to why home is an influence rather than a place. This gives you a lot of room to clear up this confusion, making it arguable. I would have had a different definition than this for the word 'home' which is why I'm thinking this is quite a debatable definition. So good job.
ReplyDeleteYour qualifiers are great for they are unique and argumentative. I just think that your qualifiers are a little wordy, so I would condense them for they are more concise and direct.
ReplyDeleteWhen people are asked what is the definition of home, they would just say a place someone lives. I think you defined your word very specifically, and its a good definition. In your qualifiers are a little confused, but It does support you definition, and I am very in curious in reading your paper.
ReplyDeletei would expand a little on influences other then that it sounds like you are on top of it.
ReplyDeleteI'm really confused. What exactly is your definition of home? Something that's not a physical object? Is it like what we make of it?
ReplyDeleteWhat do you mean by "unrealized"? I would suggect expanding your definition a little bit.
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