Sunday, August 28, 2011

Inspiration of Light - Anna Klein

As a child my Grandmother and I would spend time on the weekends taking walks on warm sunny days. She was a very optimistic woman, who always looked on the bright side. I looked up to her; not only as a child does to their grandparents, but as an inspiration. It amazed me that, even in the worst of times she would find happiness. She was like a beam of light, her presence alone seemed to light up a room.

On a brisk winter day my parents approached me to tell me that my Grandmother was in the hospital, she was out on her daily stroll and began showing signs of a heart attack. That evening I was in my bedroom thinking about my grandma and what a wholehearted woman she was until I drifted off to sleep. I began to have a dream that her and I were on our weekend walk, my grandmother pointed to the sun and put her hand on my chest, “Let the sun guide you, let it be your reminder that there is always tomorrow” she said. I then woke up to find my parents sitting around the kitchen table. They told me that my Grandmother passed away early that morning, right at sunrise. Strangely I didn’t feel sadness, yes I missed her but looking out at the sun gave me a since of comfort; I knew she was in a good place.

After dinner my family and I sat in a circle and said a prayer for my grandmother. While we were praying the lights began to flicker on and off. Instead of being scared we all continued our prayer, we knew she was there listening. She lived her life always looking on the bright side, and now she used light to communicate with us. That evening will stay in my mind forever. Even though the lights going on and off could have been a electric problem, or a power outage, I still believe it was my grandmother saying her last goodbyes. She was always beaming of light and now she used light to let us know she was still around.

22 comments:

  1. WOW I liked your use of light as inspiration and the subject of light. Your grandmother must be proud of you telling the story of her optimism.
    Logan

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  2. You started off with great pathos, appealing emotionally to your audience by describing a weekend with your grandmother. We all know that time that we spend with our grandmothers is usually pleasant, and this reminds us of our childhood. Your account of her death and the sorrow after her passing shows the readers a tender side of you, which appeals to our emotions, pathos. It also uses logos because it shows that you are a trustworthy source, and that it is credible to believe you. Your use of light is great imagery, and it gives the reader a clear picture of what is occurring.

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  3. What an inspiring story you have written! That actually touched my heart and made me feel like how you were feeling-happy. I liked how well written your story was and for some weird reason it reminds me of an episode off of the Ghost Whisper. Your story had some really strong pathos and it gives the readers all a feeling that this experience could happen to them as well and if it did, they would've felt the same way as you. Good job!

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  4. As I was reading the first paragraph, there were lots of different emotions running in my body. How you reacted after you know that she passed away and the way you telling it appeals to our emotion well! And the fact that you used light as an image of your grandma is wonderful. I love your story.

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  5. What a beautiful story! Your story was full of emotion, yet it was not a sad emotion that is usually associated with death. The way you described the walks you two took on warm SUNNY days began your story in a lovely way. Everything seemed to be tied to clarity, light, warmth and eternal life. I really enjoyed reading this story. You pulled the heart strings of the readers in a way that people don't have to be able to relate to in order to get the "chills" you get when something beautiful happens. I also thought that the way you brought up the part about the flickering lights so matter-a-factly really made me want to believe you that it was your grandmothers last goodbye. Great story, thank you for sharing it with us!

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  6. You have a wonderful story! Your story is very heartfelt which makes it true, credible, and respectful. The emotions make your writing strong and comforting because your grandmother was described in such a positive way. The quote you used was a great add in as well. Your writing is organized, clear, and easy-going though I noticed you have a little mistake when you said “looking out at the sun gave me a since of comfort” instead of sense. Awesome job!

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  7. Your story was full of emotions between you and your grandmother, and you did a great job showing that. I liked your title, it fit the story amazingly. I found it strange that you had the word grandmother capitalized a few times, then you also used the word grandma. The fact that you had grandmother and grandma in there made it inconsistent made me feel slightly like you weren't being yourself completely in the story.

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  8. That is a really cool story! It is the first one I've read that wasn't scary which was kind of a nice change. It was a very inspiring story! It is crazy that the lights flickered and stuff but at the same time seemed very comforting.

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  9. Awesome story! This is one of the best stories I have read yet, I believe. I really enjoyed how it flowed together and how you paralleled light with your grandmother. I get a sense of symbolism, and it is something I can attach to as well. Your choice of words was really good; not too extensive but simple enough that it worked effectively. Good job.

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  10. Great story i liked it a lot i could feel for you. The emotion at the beginning was great and readers attention can be caught easy. Your writing was well placed throughout the story and went in order well. You had some good pathos in the the beginning and logos as well throughout the story. I like the details in the story I could picture them so well like the walks and all nice story.

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  11. The format is kinda weird for me. Font in the first paragraph is smaller than others. Anyway, I love your story. It's such a touching one. It also flows so smoothly. I like your beginning which gives me a clear background. You make me believe in ghost more and in a positive way. Great job!

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  12. I really like how you began your story with how important your grandmother was to you and how even before she passed away she always seemed to be a living beacon, if you will, of light and the hope which is usually associated with light which was a terrific emotional appeal. The rest of the story with the references to your grandmother and how she truly reminded you of light really made the story seem cohesive.

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  13. This story was very nice. I liked how your grandmother still lights up your world. This story definently appeals to the reader's sense of pathos by introducing the feelings one gets being around their grandmother. Well written.

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  14. Captivating, intriguing, organized, relatable, chilling, you are right on point girl! This story was absolutely amazing, I literally had goose bumps as I read what she was telling you in your dream. You did a wonderful job relating all your points together, revolving your focus around the light that she brought to you and your family. I'm very impressed and touched, amazing job.

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  15. This was an amazing story! It made me all warm and fuzzy but also das at the same time. I really lied it. It was short and simple and meaningful.

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  16. Very touching! This is similar to my story in many ways. I like that even though the light flickering could be explained in many different ways, your family chose probably the most positive perspective on it.

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  17. This story was absolutely fantastic! It wasnt anything like the others, and was quite touching, rather than written to evoke fear from the reader. I really believe that this is a true story and have no reason to think otherwise.

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  18. This story was very touching. I loved the quote that you used to describe what your grandmother had said to you in your dreams. It was a really pretty quote. I love the idea of this story, that she kind of gave you the sun/light. I like how you describe her as always looking on the bright side and her presence is the lights flickering/sun.

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  19. I really enjoyed your story, it was very heartfelt and made me happy. I loved that it wasn't depressing but there were very strong emotions involved within the story. Great job.

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  20. This is such a heartwarming story, thoroughly appealing to pathos. It was astounding first your lucid dream, only to be followed by this presence seemingly enveloping your family as you prayed. Your language paired perfectly with the story, it was comfortable.

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  21. Wow what a heart warming story. I really liked it. From all of the other stories I enjoyed this one because of the happy ending. It was also written very well, good hyperbola, and imagery. You could of added more detail but it was still good! good job!

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  22. Great story! You gave reasons of why the lights flickered but I believe this story because for some reason I feel like I connected to your story. Im not sure why but i just do. Good job!

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