Sunday, August 28, 2011

The Dead in Dreams - Michael Paff

My mother has always had an open mind about spiritual forces interacting in our world. She follows the Zodiac and reads her trusted horoscope every night, "to see how her day was." She will immediately notice the horoscope's parallel's to the events that occurred to her that day. She is religious and feels that God plays an important role on the planet Earth. She feels good knowing there are forces in this world stronger than us that cannot be measured or manipulated by us in any way.

When I asked her how she was so sure that supernatural forces existed, she told me a story. A week after her mother, Mary, passed away, she had a very special dream she said was unlike any other. She was walking down her old street in Los Angeles California, towards the house where she grew up in. She focused on her house as she moved toward it, and saw her mother, Mary, watering the plants. Mary was again youthful, and glowing bright with a golden aura. Upon seeing my mother, Mary walked towards her, with a beaming smile, as she reached to take her hand. My mother felt the loving touch, and had forgotten that these events could not have been natural, because they seemed so real. My mother's sister, still alive, joined in the dream as Mary, my grandmother, hugged my mom and aunt while they cried tears of joy at their final reuniting.

My aunt, upon hearing the recounting of this dream, was amazed to tell her she had the same exact one, but from the perspective of the backyard instead of down the street. In fact, many different people who I have told this to have shared their similar stories of recently deceased loved ones visiting their family's dreams. If I keep an open enough mind, my mother tells me, I will get to give her one last goodbye as well.

22 comments:

  1. This story reminds me of an episode on Ghost Whisper. I've heard similair stories before and I believe in them. But, the stories I've heard about loved ones were scary unlike your story which was calm and peaceful. I think you did a good job and I can't find anything wrong with it. Maybe add some more details about the dream?

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  2. This was an interesting story. I had a little bit of a hard time in the middle of the story because there were some grammatical mistakes and the story didn't have a lot of detail. I think if you were to add some detail to it it would make the story not only more believable but it was also add depth to the story. I liked the fact that both your mother and her sister both had similar dreams, and that they seemed to be telling you personally about them.

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  3. Interesting tale, portrayed a final reunion, and maybe foresees a heavenly reunion once your aunt and mom pass on.Some more detail would be nice, but other things were great. Keep up the good work!

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  4. Since you started with a story about your mother reading horoscopes, this is something that we can all relate to. The idea of a mother uses ethos because we realize that you are presenting yourself to the readers. You also presented other “family” aspects into your essay which increase the emotional appeals of the story. Additionally, we all know someone who reads horoscopes, and this gives us a common ground to relate this story to. By using the familiar location of Los Angeles, California, we have a good idea of where this takes place, and this therefore makes your story more credible.

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  5. I could relate to your story! My dad passed away in 2003 and he came into my dreams saying his last words and goodbye to me. It was about 3 in the morning and I was sleeping over my aunts house because my mom had gone to visit family in California. I woke up just a little, but was yet still sleeping, and I saw that the door was halfway open then it closed. I awoke the next morning wondering if it was real or not. And to be honest, in my dreams when my dad was saying goodbye, I cried and didn't want him to go. If your grandmother came to visit you, hope all goes well. Good job with your story!

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  6. I enjoyed the introduction to your story for it makes the reader have an open mind. It brings up the beliefs in horoscopes, God and the Zodiac which helps the reader get an idea about your mother, the main character. Also, your story seems short but sweet. You present the dream/message and then connect it back to you, in the end making a personal connection with the reader. Good job!

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  7. Michael, I can connect with this story so much. Three months ago I lost my best friend, and up until recently, I never had a dream about her. When I did, it was so real I knew it was her and that there were other forces in this world playing into it. The fact that I can reflect on your own story, makes me believe that things like this do happen! Your story flows well, and I enjoyed reading it.

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  8. I enjoyed this story and have heard others like it, most of these same dreams and visions are between twins but I dont see why they couldnt be between sisters either. This story is a very logical one because it was in a dream and some crazy stuff can happen in dreams. Over all nice story.

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  9. This story is so beautiful! While reading the story, it gives me many different type of feelings, like reminiscence, sad which is why it can relate to mine emotions (pathos). And the way that you used to tell your story also make you an credible resource and make your story more believable (your mother's feeling when she saw her mom). Good job!

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  10. This story was one like what happened to my cousins too, but my cousins saw my grandpa pass away a day before it happened. While others had this gut feeling that he passed just then. Your ending brings out some sadness which enhances your pathos. The ending also brings out your mothers confidence that she believes 100% that you'll see her before her death.

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  11. This story was touching. Maybe give more details about your mother, grandmother and your auntie and also more details of that house that your mother grew up in.

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  12. I like how you started off the story talking about horoscopes. Readers can relate to that because so many people read them daily. Also the setting of the story helps because many people are familiar with Los Angeles, California, and it puts a picture in their heads. I like your story it has emotion in it the whole time.

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  13. Really good job! you did a really good job on setting up your story and explaining the beliefs of your mother. By setting that up and then explaining why your mother believed those things it helped strengthen your story! Great job although I think that you may have used too many commas! So maybe try to fix that.

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  14. This story is very cool and touching. It is nice your mom and your aunt got to get a little extra closure from there mother passing. It was a well written story and very easy to follow. I like how descriptive you were when talking about the dream and what was going on in it!

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  15. That's really interesting since I think my mom recounted a similar story to me about when her grandmother passed away. Since you story deals with being able to access final closure to a loved one its interesting since many people yearn for that and even sometimes people even regret that they didn't get to say goodbye, it without a doubt acted as a well executed emotional appeal to get the reader to believe or even consider it as true.

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  16. Appeal mostly to pathos I could imagine, in theory, some truth to what your mother told you. Because this story was personal to you it made relating quite easy. The paranormal is always fascinating, and tremendously more touching when it's as personal as this story was.

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  17. I can relate to this story based on my experiences. I thought this was very heart warming because your mother was able to say goodbye one last time and it is a special dream she will be able to always remember. Your story had good emotions that made it interesting to read. This was simple yet conveyed a lot of information about what was going on.

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  18. I enjoyed how your story was short, straight to the point and very informative. Because this story was about your family and it occurred so close to you, it made it very believable and relatable. I was intrigued and involved during every part and all around enjoyed it.

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  19. Liked how you opened up your story and gave us a lot of details your mother’s beliefs. I loved how warm this story was. It had a very good perspective. I particularly liked how it wasn’t scary, it was unusual. The fact that her sister had the exact same dream only her view was from the backyard was a very good detail to add into your story. I believed it and have had a similar experience. Well done.

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  20. I really enjoyed your story. there is a lot of people who had encounters with spirits. But I have never really encounters such things in my life, even when my grandfather passed away. For most part I though maybe you could expand more to your story, but it is still good the way it is.

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  21. Great Story! I have heard stories from my grandpa about his dreams. Ever since he got really sick from cancer he has had dreams about his wife joyce. My grandma Joyce passed away 6 years ago and he couldn't believe he was reunited with her. So because of hearing both of these stories I had an emotional connection with this story and believe every word of it.

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  22. Such a touching story. I like the way you use sources from your family which makes your story more believable and your points stronger. I actually don't believe in ghost but I know some strange things might happen. Good job!

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