Sunday, August 28, 2011

A House Haunted by the Past - Christina Lundell

I have a friend who’s mother could be considered quite the skeptic. She did not believe in folklore, relish in the supernatural world, nor consider an extraterrestrial possibility. She could be measured as a bible thumper and a realist. Although she would be seen as the last person to report a story of a “haunted” house, she apparently lived right in the middle of one. A house that was lively with supernatural activity, she recalls never feeling alone. According to her, there was always someone watching her when she would be at the house while the kids were in school and the husband working. She described him as male, older, and not very content. She also described feeling like there were two younger children in the house. She could never tell if they were both female or if one was a boy and the other a girl. Her reports are chilling, because like I said before, she never believed in any of this until it happened to her.


The house was located in the older neighborhood of the University of Denver area. The house was initially bought to be torn down, rebuilt, and remodeled. The husband, an architect, kept the remaining foundation, some of the structure, the cellar and some brick walls to incorporate the old with the new. One thing to remember is that the original house was built in 1910. Getting the explanation of the house, one can assume the type of events that were happening in there. Strange things started to occur months after the new house was built and they were all moved in. The mother taught French classes to young children after school. When no one was home that day, and she was preparing her lesson waiting for the children to arrive, she saw a black figure walk through the spacious hall in the front room. She originally thought it was her husband, so she recalled calling out his name. She knew what she saw, and no one called back. A second event occurred in the front room as well (where remaining walls of the house were). She was sitting on the couch when she heard music from a music box being played from what sounded like it was upstairs. But it wasn’t upstairs, it seemed as though it was suspended in the air, hanging at the top of the eleven-foot ceilings. It was faint, but it was loud enough to startle her and make her remember it so well. She also remembers lying in bed, being able to hear little pitter-patter footsteps in the hallway outside her bedroom. Or the feeling of someone standing on the side of your bed, staring at her. Also, the fact that in the cellar, which was an underground maze, there was a plaque in a room that read “Jesus vs. Satan”. One more thing to add is a previous owner of the original house rang the doorbell one day, asking the mother if “anything strange had been happening”. Seems completely outlandish, but she swore all of this was true. She never told her husband any of this, having fears of him believing she was crazy. After they moved a few years later, she never had any type of events like this happen to her again. She truly believes that there was something in that house, even though the house was ultimately new. Something or someone had stayed in that house and was not happy about the new residents. Her views of the ghostly world have been forever altered.   

25 comments:

  1. Christina,
    That story is a great work of art, and it chilled my spine. Congrats on such a magnificent piece, and keep it up!

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  2. You did a good job of giving the reader enough background information to picture what exactly is happening. Your description of the area where this occurred is important because it shows the readers that you know what you are talking about, and that we should believe you. Many people also know that cellars are almost non-existent in newer homes, and this would give them a good idea of the time-period when the house was built. You appeal to the readers very logically, using logos, and this makes you a credible, trustworthy source. I thought that your descriptive also created an emotional appeal, because we could comprehend exactly what was going on.

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  3. You should change your format because it was hard to read it. Your story grabbed my attention because I always wanted to know more about the houses and those people who used to lived on what is now the Auraria Campus. In your story you added several events of the ghostly encounter and that was good because it kept me interested and it also made your story more believable as well. Your grammar was good, only thing I suggest fixing is your format.

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  4. Wow, This is one of the best story I've read so far! Your choices of words are spectacular, the pictures/details of the story, they like appear in front of me as I keep on reading. You used the mood of the mother as to appeal to the readers' emotions and that's good because it make your story more reliable. Your particular descriptions in the story let me believe that you know what you are talking about. Great job, Christina!

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  5. What an interesting story. The way you began your stroy by talking about how she was not one to talk about haunted things of ghosts, rally added to your credibility.You were kind of elusive about describing the house, which both made me slightly confused about your story and made me a little more frightened. Your story had a creepy undertone to it, but the way that you described these "ghosts" was not in a creepy way, but more of just a weird incident. I would have loved more detail in the story, because I think it would have made it easier to relate to. But other than that I really enjoyed reading your story!

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  6. Your story was nicely written and it gave me chills too! The fact that this house is local, the events happened to your friend’s mom, and she wasn’t a believer in ghosts at first shows credibility. You have good word choices and very descriptive details as well. I especially like how you illustrated the houses details and said “pitter-patter footsteps” when explaining what the character heard. You did an awesome job!

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  7. I found that your opening was a little bit long. I liked how you were really descriptive, it made picturing the strange events much easier. There is a lot of credibility in this story like the mother being a non-believer then believing and you also saying it was a "chilling report" which shows that you believed it, at least a little. Relating it to campus helped relate it to the audience because the only audience are all in Denver, pretty nice touch there.

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  8. Great story! I like how much background you give on the house, it really paints a good picture of where all this is taking place. I also like the fact that you explain in detail how this lady didn't believe in ghost at all until all this. It makes it more believable.

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  9. Good story the beginning was nice with the information and knowledge you presented to the readers, very helpful. Also the details you had showed you know what you were talking about and helps readers believe the story more. I like the ghost some people can relate to that maybe some more detail but I still liked it nice story.

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  10. Nice story! The beginning is kinda slow but on the second paragraph, you grab my attention pretty well by using descriptive language. I think it would be better to break the second paragraph into smaller ones. I have heard of many similar ghost stories like this so this piece is completely believable to me. Good job!

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  12. At first, from the mention of the skeptic I wasn't sure how believable your story would be. As the story progressed and as you began describing how she truly felt a presence or multiple presences at differing times it seemed to become increasingly real. The background about the house added to the story except for the lack of details about the family who initially owned the house.Since your source was initially an unconvinced skeptic her claims do seem somewhat unbiased even though she and you seem to be the only ones who know.

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  13. I liked that the story-teller to you was a skeptic which helps solidify the appeal to logos, by helping the reader suspend even their beliefs about the supernatural. I also thought that the fact that a house had been torn down for a modern one helps the logistics of the story because I have heard many other sorties dealing with ghosts that are angry that their reality is gone.

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  14. It's interesting to see what it takes to move skeptics into believers. I'm sure she felt all sorts of emotions when having these encounters. It takes a lot to hold all that back and not tell anybody for fear of people thinking she was crazy. You did a good job telling the story, it was easy to follow and strait to the point which I like. Good job

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  15. The way the story began was in a skeptic perspective, which I am myself so it was easy to connect to. I agree with Paresa of how interesting it is to withhold all your feelings of thinking your crazy but actually believing in something supernatural that is occuring. Abstaining from displaying those feelings can make you crazy enough. Very well written story. It recommend breaking everything down into small paragraphs for next time for it makes it easier to read for the readers. Other than that very good story!

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  16. Nice background on the mother, who wasn't one of those believers. I think you should break up that gimomus paragraph and have one about the events that she was encountering. I also liked the fact that no ones knows about the origins about those ghosts.

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  17. Oh yeah and the part where the previous owner stopped by was kinda random... i suggest that you should leave that part out.

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  18. Creepy! For some people just hearing stories won't do it for them, they'll have to get haunted for reals to ever believe. Good description, I was freaked out by the image of some creepy music box that won't shut up strung from a high ceiling...

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  19. Your word choice and vocabulary really made this a great story! And the fact that it happened to someone that doesnt believe in that nonsense was great! It really appealed to those who are all skeptics as well. Great job!

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  20. I really enjoyed this story! It had great description and painted a great image in my mind. The characters were nicely set up and you described them well. By stating that your friends mother was a skeptic it helped suck in people who may be skeptical themselves .Your story telling skills are really good!

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  21. Wow, this story was pretty creepy. I liked how you went into a lot of detail and you used very good descriptive words, letting me visualize your story and idea well. The fact that they lady never believed in ghosts or anything like that made the story much more believable to those who didn't believe either. The “Jesus vs. Satan” part was scary. Well done!

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  22. Sweet story it creeped me out and kept me interested! it made it all the more believable because of the fact that the woman was not afraid or did not believe in those types of things.

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  23. It was hard to continue reading your story after the introduction, while detailed, it was a little much for me. Vivid imagery made up for the lengthy commencement, you painted a perfect picture of the scene. Paired with colorful vocabulary, it was a great story.

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  24. I really enjoyed your story. You have great vocabulary, and it your story being so descriptive was really creepy. I liked it! good job!

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  25. Good story! I like how the main character didn't believe in ghost or the paranormal activity to build the credibility. After that I believed every word of the story because why would someone become a hypocrite. So I believe this story is true.

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