What are dreams? Scientific definition: dreams are a series of thoughts, images, and sensations occurring in a person’s mind during sleep. Common definition: dreams are just the happy place where you can escape to and have things the ways you wanted them to be. But sometimes, they WILL go wrong and become nightmares, and sometimes, those nightmares will come true and haunt you!
I believe that everyone, at least once in their lives, has had a dream about something. But to everyone out there, do you think that dreams/nightmares can come true? For me, I would say, “Yes, yes they can! But not all of them, just the WORST ones, nightmares!!”
It happened to me about two years ago after I moved into my new house. That day was just like any other Wednesday, except I was too tired to do anything else; I went to school in the morning then came back at around 4 o’clock in the afternoon. Forgetting that I had tons of homework to do, I fell asleep right away on my comfy bed. I finally woke up at about 9 o’clock but I was still too tired to start on the homework, so just like any other teenagers, I decided to finish it on the next school day. I tried to sleep again but couldn’t because I slept the whole afternoon. Then I fell into something that people called “half-asleep, half-awake”. At that time, I knew I was dreaming. In the dream, I found myself standing in an ancient room alone. In front of me, there was an old bed with no mattress on it, which made me feel a little uncomfortable if I had to sleep there. I looked to my right and there was a tiny closet covered in dust, it might have been the smallest closet I’ve ever seen, its darken brownish color scared me. I thought if I opened it, something would jump out and grab me. Suddenly, I heard someone calling my name from behind me; it was a girl’s voice, a really soft voice; that startled me a bit. As I turned around, I felt a chill coming down on both sides of my body, no one was there except for a big white door near the bookshelf. Next to it, there were a lot of strange patterns on the wall, and what scared me was that they were all covered in red paint! At that moment, I started getting a feeling that someone was there with me. On the door, I noticed that there was a shadow, or an image maybe, of a little girl starting to appear; it was like she was walking out from that door toward me. I felt like everything was happening in slow motion. As I tried to focus on the girl’s face to see who she was, I got out of the dream like stage immediately (I knew that I was back to reality). Next, I felt like someone was pulling the collar of my shirt… but I couldn’t open my eyes or even move my hands or my body. I tried to do it but I just couldn’t, I was scared to death! After a minute or so, all of a sudden, everything was gone, the chilly, scary feeling, the moving collar, and that little girl in my head, they were gone.
At that time, I could open my eyes; my hands and legs started “working” again. I felt relieved. But I was still scared that it’s going to happen again, so I got up and went to sleep with my mom. The next morning, I didn’t want to tell anybody about what happened last night because I knew that they would get freaked out, and for my mom, I made up some “dumb” reasons to get out of her attention.
Till now, I had experienced about two to three dreams like that and they were all about that little girl. I’m not really sure if she actually exists or not, or relates to me (maybe) but the one thing I know for sure is that she won’t let me see her face or know who she is!
I believe that everyone, at least once in their lives, has had a dream about something. But to everyone out there, do you think that dreams/nightmares can come true? For me, I would say, “Yes, yes they can! But not all of them, just the WORST ones, nightmares!!”
It happened to me about two years ago after I moved into my new house. That day was just like any other Wednesday, except I was too tired to do anything else; I went to school in the morning then came back at around 4 o’clock in the afternoon. Forgetting that I had tons of homework to do, I fell asleep right away on my comfy bed. I finally woke up at about 9 o’clock but I was still too tired to start on the homework, so just like any other teenagers, I decided to finish it on the next school day. I tried to sleep again but couldn’t because I slept the whole afternoon. Then I fell into something that people called “half-asleep, half-awake”. At that time, I knew I was dreaming. In the dream, I found myself standing in an ancient room alone. In front of me, there was an old bed with no mattress on it, which made me feel a little uncomfortable if I had to sleep there. I looked to my right and there was a tiny closet covered in dust, it might have been the smallest closet I’ve ever seen, its darken brownish color scared me. I thought if I opened it, something would jump out and grab me. Suddenly, I heard someone calling my name from behind me; it was a girl’s voice, a really soft voice; that startled me a bit. As I turned around, I felt a chill coming down on both sides of my body, no one was there except for a big white door near the bookshelf. Next to it, there were a lot of strange patterns on the wall, and what scared me was that they were all covered in red paint! At that moment, I started getting a feeling that someone was there with me. On the door, I noticed that there was a shadow, or an image maybe, of a little girl starting to appear; it was like she was walking out from that door toward me. I felt like everything was happening in slow motion. As I tried to focus on the girl’s face to see who she was, I got out of the dream like stage immediately (I knew that I was back to reality). Next, I felt like someone was pulling the collar of my shirt… but I couldn’t open my eyes or even move my hands or my body. I tried to do it but I just couldn’t, I was scared to death! After a minute or so, all of a sudden, everything was gone, the chilly, scary feeling, the moving collar, and that little girl in my head, they were gone.
At that time, I could open my eyes; my hands and legs started “working” again. I felt relieved. But I was still scared that it’s going to happen again, so I got up and went to sleep with my mom. The next morning, I didn’t want to tell anybody about what happened last night because I knew that they would get freaked out, and for my mom, I made up some “dumb” reasons to get out of her attention.
Till now, I had experienced about two to three dreams like that and they were all about that little girl. I’m not really sure if she actually exists or not, or relates to me (maybe) but the one thing I know for sure is that she won’t let me see her face or know who she is!
Your story was very descriptive and it actually gave chills down my spine just reading about it! I like how you explained your story well enough that the readers can visualize it. The only thing I suggest is that even out your paragraphs. The third paragraph is way too long and all your other paragraphs are really short compared to your third one which makes the format of your story look off a little. Other than that good job!
ReplyDeleteThe description of the little girl and the ancient room seems like it might have been an old relative when she was young or maybe... a guess at a true love. I liked the way you weaved the story together. the plot made sense and I liked the subconciousness.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you opened up to your readers right away, because this created an ethical appeal to the readers. It made you seem like a credible, trustworthy source, and this was a great use of ethos. Since you started talking about dream, this is something that we can all relate to. I think that this also increases your credibility. Also, you explained the situation well, and gave the reader plenty of background information so that they knew exactly what was going on.
ReplyDeleteI love hearing about peoples dreams, especially the crazy ones! I liked how you talked about the typical school day of a student, because in that way we could al relate to the story that you were about to tell. I think that maybe the part in the beginning about dreams coming true may have led me to believe that your story was about some thing else. The details you used to describe the dream that you had were great for the image that you were trying to portray. The fact in the beginning about the definition of a dream was good, although I think you could have described it a bit more so that it would fit into your story. Overall I really enjoyed reading your story! Good Job!
ReplyDeleteDreams fascinate me. I experience many odd dreams that don't make sense so I can relate. Maybe the little girl represents something in your life? Could be relative or completely opposite of what it seems. Is very interesting to think about and wonder what on earth does it mean?! I liked how it tied together well, and the fact that your mom was skeptical. Shows both sides. Good story.
ReplyDeleteWhen I read your opening I liked how you talked about what your story is about. I believed your story because it was a dream and anyone could have a dream. Also that part where you were stuck and couldn't do anything happened to be before. I also hear about it all the time from family and friends. Your story is very believable, the color red on the walls also puts a click in my mind that something sketch may happen. Your story has strong pathos because there's a lot that relates to me.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this story! The beginning was really informative with the definition of dreams. I have had dreams just like this so I can really relate to what you are saying! Great job on the descriptive language used it really painted a strong Image for me!
ReplyDeleteGreat story the beginning was well done with the information of dreams it opened readers from the start. it helped readers relate easy to the story because everyone has weird dreams. You also explained the situation well and provided great back ground information for the readers nice story.
ReplyDeleteThat sounds like a freaky dream! I like how you explained a lot of what was happening. The fact that you have dreams about this girl more than once gave me chills. I wonder what it is telling you. I think that dreams are interesting and unique, especially this one since it started taking place only when you moved into your new house. Hopefully you don’t get any more like this because nightmares aren’t the best dreams to get.
ReplyDeleteIf I was you, I would make something up. Like you asked your mom random questions about a little girl until your mom confessed that you had a little sibling that was unfortunately died when she was still an offspring. I think I would be more believable since you said you experienced 2 or 3 times about her. I like your descriptive language and great details which made it easy to follow. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteFrom the beginning, I could relate to your experience of oversleeping and how after you've woken up and tried to return back to sleep it's takes a lot more than counting sheep for you to truly be asleep. In that half awake half asleep state nothing as interesting has happened to me but the way you described the setting of your dream and the emotions that were evoked by what happened as well as what happened in your half awake state after the little girl's shadow's eerie appearance really built up the suspense. The mention of how you had a couple nightmares in addition where the little girl had appeared but stayed equally as evasive made the story increasingly scary yet at the same time believable. After the first couple times it happened you were able identify how the nightmare you recounted was similar to the other ones.
ReplyDeleteThis might just be my skepticism talking but maybe your body was asleep without your mind being asleep. Any way the dream part of the story was interesting the descriptiveness of the story helped appeal to the reader's pathos. I could see the room you were in and the white door it all seemed pretty real so i csan only imagine what it was like for you.
ReplyDeleteBe careful of your definitions in the introduction, I don't know if those sound like definitions you came up with so just keep an eye on it! Other than that I like the enthusiasm of your story, I could hear it as I read along. Good work.
ReplyDeleteWhat a creepy dream! Especially ones that reoccur with that creepy little girl. I liked the intro because it gives the readers an idea of what you are going to be talking about and of course it was about your dreams. I liked your descriptions of your dream, it's like as if l was there with you.
ReplyDeleteThe beginning of your story gave a good description of what a restless state you were in before you fell asleep giving the reader the feeling that you were in a deep sleep. From there, you used lots of descriptions that overall helped the reader get a mental picture of the dream. It was quite the odd dream that some of us could identify with every once in awhile. Overall interesting story.
ReplyDeleteCreepy! But I am left confused because you argued that this nightmare came true? It seems to me like you just had a dream! You should change your argument or describe something similar to that nightmare that occurred in real life. Other than that, good...and scary!
ReplyDeleteThe phenomenon of lucid dreams is tremendously interesting, especially since I can't recall most of my dreams. And, I particularly have not experienced any of the dreams I do recall acted out in reality. Perhaps it could be a psychological event, something occurring in the neurological system? Perhaps not though. Inexplicable experiences happen every day after all.
ReplyDeleteYou chose a really good topic to write about because everyone has dreams. This allows anyone to connect with the text. I personally always found dreams really interesting and but sometimes very frightening. Your story also reminds me of teh one we read in class about the lady who was being followed by the little boy only she saw. Good detail. Also Nice job defining the word dream at the beginning, in case someone in a different culture read it and had another name for dreams.
ReplyDeleteI agree with others, lucid dreaming really is an amazing thing, and ive experienced quite a few lucid dreams before. While mine have always been terrific, i feel for your bad "trip," it sounds terrible. Because these occurrences are very common among avid lucid dreamers and your every day person, i would say your story gets an A+ in the relate-ability category. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you delved into explaining what it was like to be you in your dream.
ReplyDeleteIt was easy to relate to and scary because everybody has dreams and nightmares. This story was very believable because anything can happen in dreams. Good choice of topic. The idea of it being a little girl is creepy, like on the ring. This story was fun to read.
This story was so creepy!!!! I enjoyed picturing everything that was going on and was interested the whole time. I can also relate to being half asleep and half awake, I dream and think i see things that make me even jump out of my bed! Great work.
ReplyDeletewow What a weird story. I actually can relate to this kind of dreams. I always have dream where they become repetitive and they go away for a long period of time and they would come back after 1 or 2 years again. It never really crosses my mind because I just for get about them. But one suggestion is that the part of u coming home from school and doing Homework and what not seems irrelevant to your story so I would take that part out. But over all good job! well told story
ReplyDeleteI like how you gave the true definition and the common definition that most people would associate dreams to. So already I was intrigued in why you were being so logical in defying a dream. Then the little girl made me think that she was trying to pull you to show you something like normal little kids do. So good story and I believe it!
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